Old MSPFA from like early to mid 2024. The art and writing (but ESPECIALLY the art) is VERY VERY ASS
Aside from the incredibly terrible art i wanna know yalls thoughts. there WILL be trolls and classpects btw
please just give me criticisms cuz there IS some things i wanna keep (like for example im pretty proud of the gifs, even if they were kinda easy) cuz i wanna rewrite it soon !!!!!!!!!1!1111!1111!!11111!!!!
https://mspfa.com/?s=57362&p=1
It's rough, but it's got something. Definitely worth having another go at!
Main problems - wobbly linework; proportions of the characters need a lot of work, especially in the more ambitious poses - their limbs just don't seem to work right sometimes. You could push it either to more realistic or to more zany and exaggerated. But I guess you're already improving at this kind of thing. (NB: I can't draw to save my life!)
Stuff I liked:
Script: absolutely fine, if you ask me! Good mix of goofiness and mystery. Why is this perfectly ordinary snakelover walking down a road to nowhere? What IS Circe's deal? I want to know.
That sprite verson of Deno is pretty damn solid.
Colours: I REALLY like your colour palatte here. especially Circe's outfit and the hills and sky in the first couple of pages.
I like your facial expressions, especially Deno smiling at the snake on page 8.
Strong, contrasting character designs. Page 15 shows this off very nicely.
And yeah, that gif of the pendant morphing is smooth.
"This is StuckUnderHell, nor am I out of it." - Mephistopheles
@tavroscrocker
thank you so much!! i am definitely a LOT better at art now and it will PROBABLY be a lot better looking once i start getting all the drawings re-done
also yea re-reading, i agree i think the writing is actually better than i gave credit for, i guess I’m just critical of myself
i also need to get access to a computer before i can start really getting the comic going again, just so it will be easier to update and also make things like more sprites (i might keep denos old sprite but ill at least update it)
but yea thank you for the feedback!!!! hopefully I’ll get things going sooner than later, and even if it does end up being later at least it’ll be out at all if that makes sense :o)